The line graph below shows the changes in the share price of Outokumpu companies in euros between January 2006 and December 2010.

The line graph illustrates information about the changing share
price
of Outokumpu companies in euros over a period of nearly five years starting from June 2006 until Dec 2010.
First
of all, of all, the
price
has reached the peak
in
Suggestion
at
around the end of 2006. It was nearly Eur 33. There was a fluctuation during the
year
2007. At the start of the
year
2008, the
price
has increased steadily to reach 30 Eur after that the
price
has dropped dramatically to reach
the lowest point
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a lower point
lower point
the lower point
less than 10 Eur at the end of 2008. There was
a
expresses position, direction or location, or point in time
at
a slight recovering in 2009.
In
Suggestion
Between
2010, the
price
remained fluctuating with a gradual rise in the middle of the
year followed
Accept comma addition
year, followed
by a steady decline at the end of the
year
. In conclusion, there was a fluctuation and a decrease almost in the share
price
of Outokumpu companies in euros almost every
year
,
its
it is
it's
only significantly rose twice during the whole five years.
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