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Inventors are not as important to society as doctors. To what extent do you agree with this statement? Provide reasons for your answer. Include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#inventors #society #doctors
Nowadays, we can see science everywhere around us. New inventions
makes
Suggestion
make
 the lives of the people easier. On
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 hand doctors are really important persons for us. Doctors are the person who help us to get well when we become sick. They save our lives. In my opinion, inventions and doctors are incomparable both have different roles in our lives. Lots of inventions have become very important part of our lives.
For example
,
aero planes
an aircraft that has a fixed wing and is powered by propellers or jets
aeroplanes
 by which we can travel and reach to
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 countries earlier as compare to
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 means of transportation. Computers which
is
Suggestion
are
 the most amazing invention. We are totally now become dependent on computers, it has lots of benefits and is useful in many ways. In offices, shopping malls, schools and homes, people use computers to save lots of data, documents, calculations and doing assignments.
Furthermore
, smart phones are
also
one
 of the most important inventions for peoples. People found it
most convenient
Suggestion
more convenient
 for them in carrying as well as lots of applications are available due to which they can contact with their family, relatives and friends.
Moreover
, there are lots of things that are invented by inventors that had made
house
male possessive pronoun
his
 work
also
 easy
for example
, home appliances, washing machines, refrigerators etc. On
another hand doctors
Suggestion
other hand, doctors
other hand doctors
 are most knowledgeable persons that can treat different diseases. Doctors study a lot and always want to get rid of illness from a patient. If there will be no doctors
then
 no
one
 can protect the sick people and mortality rate increase extremely. There are lots of procedures
also
 done to protect the
one
 life. Doctors perform different screening and diagnose disease properly. In conclusion, both have
different role
Suggestion
different roles
a different role
 and values in our lives, without
doctors human
Accept comma addition
doctors, human
 beings cannot survive healthy or we can say that no
one
 can be there to protect from illnesses.
Obviously without
Accept comma addition
Obviously, without
inventors new
Accept comma addition
inventors, new
 inventions cannot take place and there would be no new unique discovery people would be able to see.
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