The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited certain Brighton attractions between 1980 and 2010. We can see that in 1980 and in 2010 the favourite attractions were the pavilion and the festival. In 1980 the least popular attraction was the pier but in 2010
this
changed and the art gallery was the least popular. During the 1980s and
1990s
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there was a sharp increase in visitors to the pavilion from 28% to 48% and
then
the percentage gradually went down to 31% in 2010. The trend for the art gallery was similar to the pavilion. Visitors increased rapidly from 22% to 37% from 1980 to 1985
then
gradually decreased to less than 10% over the
next
twenty-five years. The number of tourists who visited the Brighton Festival fluctuated slightly but in
general
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remained steady at about 25%. Visitors to the pier
also
fluctuated from 1980 to 2000
then
rose significantly from 12% to 22% between 2000 and 2010.
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