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During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants. Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter • remind him when and where you met • tell him what kind of job you are interested in • say what you think you would be suitable for the job

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Dear Sir, My name is Jane Morgan and we met during a plane journey from Mumbai to London. I have heard
lot
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 about
reputation
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the reputation
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 of your chain of
restaurant
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restaurants
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 and would like to
work
 in the same. I have
degree
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a degree
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 in hotel management and currently working as
chef
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a chef
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 in
4 star
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 hotel in
the
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west London. I have 2 years of experience as a
chef
 and can prepare Indian and Italian delicacies. If you will provide me with
opportunity
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the opportunity
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 to
work
 in one of your
restaurant
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than
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then
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 I will
able
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 to prove myself as
useful
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a useful
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 investment.
However
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 if you already have
chef
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a chef
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 position filled
than
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then
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 I will be happy to
work
 as an assistant to
existing
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an existing
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chef
. I will be suitable for the job since I am very responsible. I
also
 have experience in working with
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the group
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group
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 and
also
 as a team leader. I can
also
work
 under peer pressure. I hope you will consider my application. Looking forward to your reply. Yours sincerely, Jane Morgan
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • chain of restaurants
  • potential job opportunity
  • relevant experience
  • managerial role
  • customer service
  • qualifications
  • certifications
  • unique skills
  • eagerness
  • admiration
  • resume
  • references
  • face-to-face meeting
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