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Many people have difficulty maintaining a healthy diet. What are the causes of this problem? How could it be solved?

#people #difficulty #diet
These
days many
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days, many
 people struggle to eat healthy
food
 consistently. A primary cause of
this
 trend is the availability of cheap and quick dining options for people who don’t make
time
 to prepare healthy
food
 at home
.
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.
This
 problem can be solved by allocating a set of
time
 to grocery and cooking healthy
food
. Nowadays parents are working
this
 lead them less
time
 for the family and house work. In
market we
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the market, we
the market we
 can find so many options for
food
 which requires less
time
 to cook or just need to microwave it and it is ready to consume.
This
 is due to we don't want to take
effort
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the effort
 to go for grocery shopping and cooking
food
 at home. People think
instead
 of wasting
time
 in cooking they can spend
this
time
 with their family. Allocating a set of
time
 for grocery and cooking healthy
food
 can solve
this
 problem. For working parents on weekends they can prepare the
food
 which they can eat on week days. In
this
 way they can get healthy home made
food
 and
this
 is better than going for fast
food
 like hamburger. Other than
this
 they can use some tricks and tips and can search for quick healthy recipes from
internet
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the internet
 which just require 20-30 minutes for cooking. In conclusion, from the
forementions
an arrangement of people or things acting as a unit
formations
 point it is lucid that how we can deny for cheap and quick
food
 options and by using some tricks we can solve
this
 problem.
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