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Some people believe that eventually all jobs will be done by artificially intelligent robots. Whats your opinion?

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The
last
 decade has seen a rise in the use of artificial
intelligence
 across most industries.
This
 growing trend has led a section of people to believe that artificially intelligent robots, will replace humans in the workplace. The speed and efficiency of artificial
intelligence
 will be leveraged in many streams of
work
,
however
 jobs that require emotional understanding and logical by empathetic reasoning will continue to be done by humans.
This
 essay will discuss why artificial
intelligence
 cannot replace all jobs. Robots have a role to play in manufacturing facilities. Speed and precision are important factors that lead to the economic production of high-quality products. Artificially intelligent robots programmed to achieve the desired outcomes are better suited to operate a manufacturing plant as opposed to humans whose
work
 may be subject to error.
For example
, the leading can manufacturer, Ford declared a 30% boost in production and a 20% reduction in wastage after migrating to a fully automated production facility operated by artificially intelligent robots. Human’s may be less efficient than robots in the stream of manufacturing, but they are extremely important in many industries
such
 as service, media, fashion, consulting, and medicine to name a few. Human beings are social animals and require the emotional support of another fellow human.
For instance
, people are generally unsatisfied talking to a virtual assistant on the phone as opposed to a customer service representative. Human beings can reason and understand a person’s predicament before suggesting a solution, a programmed robot can never match up to
this
.
For example
, a doctor recommends a treatment to his patients not only considering his illness, but
also
 other important parameters like family support, insurance coverage,
work
 etc.
Thus
, human involvement is imperative in many streams of
work
. There has been an increasing presence of artificial
intelligence
 in our everyday lives. In my opinion, robots do have a role to play in many industries as they are more efficient than humans,
however
 many industries and sectors need a human workforce because, we are after all emotional beings who rely on each other’s support.
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