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You kid school is going for a trip outside country for 3 days and parent is allowed to join the group ask questions about the trip why you want to join the group? how can you help?

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my keen interest in the international
trip
 which your school is organising for 10th class students. I would like to know if a parent is allowed to accompany on the
trip
 as my child is participating in
this
 tour. I have been a solo traveller during my college days and I am passionate about different cultures and traditions. As the
trip
 is going to Bhutan, which is famous for monasteries and peaceful places, I personally admire
such
 places. In the past, I have planned several office trips
also
, so I want to volunteer myself to
this
 tour. Apart from
this
, I like to play with children and during emergencies I assure you that I will provide support to the children. It would be great if you can provide me additional information about the
trip
 if I can join the group. What sort of items I need to take with me as a volunteer and need details about mode of transportation. I look forward to hear from you. Yours faithfully, Seema Ahlawat

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