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Some people say that art subjects such as music, drama and creative writing are an essential part of education, and every school should include them in its syllabus. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your opinion and examples from your own experience

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For the holistic development of children, schools should have a perfect mix of academic as well as non-academic subjects. According to some people, it should be made compulsory for students to learn music, acting and creative writing. I agree with
this
 viewpoint as learning these subjects will enhance their creative skills, and they will
also
 get a much needed break from regular subjects.
To begin
 with, having extracurricular subjects
such
 as arts, drama and creative writing in the syllabus helps students enormously.
This
 is because when students learn these courses, it enables them to develop their creative, thinking and imaginative skills, which are beneficial for learning academic subjects.
For instance
, it is easier for a student with higher imagination capabilities to solve a complex mathematics problem.
Additionally
, some children are blessed with artistic skills so these classes will give them a platform where they can develop these abilities
further
 and perfect them. Another benefit of having non-academic subject in the curriculum is that it alleviates the academic pressure on children. These subjects give students a much needed break from their regular academic curriculum. Undoubtedly, competition among students has increased which can sometimes lead to stress.
Therefore
, it has become imperative for both schools and parents to let children spend some time doing activities which can give them a chance to relax their mind and body. For
this
 reason, many schools have already included
such
 subjects as part of their syllabus. If,
however
, students are not given
this
 break, it will become difficult for them to stay focused, motivated and enthusiastic in other subjects because of stress. To conclude, including arts, drama and creative writing in school curriculum will help students to reap rich benefits by strengthening their thinking power and relaxing their mind;
therefore
, they should be made a mandatory part of the school syllabus.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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