The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram shows how
water
is used to generate electricity in a hydroelectric power station.
Overall
, the use of
water
is different during the
day
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daytime
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time
and the
night
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nighttime
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time
.
Water
from the river is blocked by a dam and stored in a high-level
reservoir
. At the bottom of the dam, the intake is opened during the
day
while
it is
being
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apply
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closed at night. In the
day
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daytime
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time
, once the intake is opened, the
water
flows into a tunnel and goes down to the power station. The force of the falling
water
makes the turbines
spinning
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spin
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, activating the generator
while
the
water
keeps going to a
lower level
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lower-level
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reservoir
.
Then
, the electricity generated is transmitted to the national grid via power lines. In the night
time
,
water
from the lower level
reservoir
flows back into the turbines
then
pumped to flow the
water
back into the high-level
reservoir
through the same tunnel that
water
flows in the
day
time
.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, day, time, reservoir with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "goes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "goes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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