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The chart illustrates the total minutes that the British use telephone call between 1995 to 2002 in three types including Local - fixed line, national and international - fixed line, and mobiles.

The chart illustrates the total minutes that the British use telephone call between 1995 to 2002 in three types including Local - fixed line, national and international - fixed line, and mobiles.
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The chart illustrates the total
minutes
 that the British
use
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 telephone
call
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calls
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 between 1995 to 2002 in three types including the local - fixed line, the national and international - fixed line, and
the
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apply
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mobiles.
Overall
, the
amount
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number
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 of
minutes
of
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apply
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the local calls was more than the other two types all the periods
while
 usage of the national and international, and
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apply
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mobiles were increasing. The total
minutes
 of
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local calls increased from just over 70
billion
minutes
 in 1995 to
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a
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 peak
at
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of
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 90
billion
minutes
 in 1999. Even if, it steadily dropped to slightly over 70
billion
minutes
 in 2002 but its total call
minutes
was
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were
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 still more than the other two types during the periods. The total call
minutes
 of the national and international started from just under 40
billion
minutes
 in 1995 and steadily increased to just over 60
billion
minutes
 in 2002. In the same way, the total call
minutes
 of mobiles slightly grow from under 10
billion
minutes
 in 1995 to over 10
billion
minutes
 in 1999 and it considerably increased to more than 40
billion
minutes
 in 2002.

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