Some people believe that advertising has a strong effect on a person's decision making process. Others feel that it has little or no real impact. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.
In our society,
advertisements
are ubiquitous and people
sometimes get trapped by their marketing strategies. However
, although
some people
believe that advertising can influence on
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people
's decision making
, I side with those who feel that there is little impact on Add a hyphen
decision-making
people
's motivation to buy products.
On the one hand, it can be argued that advertisements
are usually visually attractive to get consumers' attraction. In fact, a lot of artistic work is done for them by professional graphic artists. For example
, fast
food industry often provides very Correct article usage
the fast
quality
advertisement that makes them better than they actually lookCorrect word choice
high-quality
like
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Furthermore
, advertisements
are to show seasonal trends
, so that people
who are keen to follow those trends
can be informed the
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of the
trends
.
However
, despite the benefits of advertising, I side with those who believe that people
get less interest from advertisement
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advertisements
People
in our sophisticated society, in my opinion, are way smarter than ever before and they are no longer easy to be lured by the industries. Since most customers expect that advertisements
are exaggerated, they are more likely to be cautious what
to believe and to buy. Change preposition
about what
Additionally
, I personally believe that cost-effective goods are more chance to be purchased than the goods which were on
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in
advertisements
. Price, in my view, is what matters for buyers after all. Finally
, the strongest argue
is Replace the word
argument
that
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people
's personal opinion
on the products. Individuals are Fix the agreement mistake
opinions
most
likely to trust their Rephrase
more
friends
or relatives' personal opinions Change noun form
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friends'
comparing
to Wrong verb form
compared
advertise
.
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advertising
although
advertising often shows the trends
to customers and they are usually well designed and attract people
, consumers are now wiser when they try to buy something than before and they also
tend to believe what other people
said
, not the information Wrong verb form
say
on
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in
advertisements
. Therefore
, on balance, I strongly believe that advertising has no impact for
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on
the
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apply
people
's decision making
process.Add a hyphen
decision-making
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