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Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer nations by providing such things as food and education? Or is it the responsibility of the governments of poorer nations to look after their citizens themselves?

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Many countries in todays world are considered under developed and struggle for basic needs of life
such
 as food and education, whereas there are many nations which are well developed and has the capacity of supporting other nations as well.
This
 essay will discuss the reasons why the wealthier countries should help the
under privileged
lacking the rights and advantages of other members of society
underprivileged
 nations and what are the responsibilities of the governments of poor countries towards their citizens. Countries which are already developed should help other countries because as they have abundant resources to fulfil their needs, the poorer nations lack them. In my opinion, the
waelthy
having an abundant supply of money or possessions of value
wealthy
 nations should contribute some share of their money
with
Suggestion
to
 the under privileged nations so that they can have enough food and education which will help them develop.
For instance
, the developed countries can help others who have suffered from any natural calamities to cope up with their damages. Even though other countries try to help the poor nations
,
Accept space
,
 the main responsibility of taking care of their citizens is on the government. The government should take measures to help people get food in daily basis and shelter to live in. They should take initiatives for providing free educations to children which will help the youngsters get a job which will directly
effect
have an effect upon
affect
 the economy of the nation. In conclusion, the sole responsibility of taking care of the nation is of the
government whereas
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government, whereas
 other countries can
also
 contribute according to their wish.
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