Some parents believe that learning mathematics at schools is redundant and should not be taught while others believe that it should remain a foundational subject whether or not it is used in later life. Discuss both sides.

The line graph gives information about the amounts of fish and different types of meat namely chicken, beef and lamb consumed in a European country over a period of 15 years.
Overall
, it can be seen from the line graph that
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fish consumption was lower than others throughout the period shown.
Also
, the amounts of beef and lamb used decreased,
while
the
figure
for chicken increased dramatically between 1979 and 2004. In 1979, the amount of lamb was exactly 150
grams
per person per week, but
this
figure
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significantly to about 75
grams
,which was
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half of the
figure
in 1979. In
term
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of beef,
this
figure
in 1979 was about 220
grams
;
however
, in the following
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it fluctuated before falling by around 100
grams
in the rest of the period. Turning to the remaining categories, we can see that the amount of fish eaten dropped slightly to roughly 50
grams
in 2004.
By contrast
, the
figure
for chicken followed the opposite trend, it
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sharply and
then
reached its peak of about 260
grams
in 2004, which was the highest point in the graph.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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