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The charts summarise the weight measurements of people living in Charlestown in 1955 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts summarise the weight measurements of people living in Charlestown in 1955 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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 charts provide an analysis of the
weight
 issues among the residents of the town of Charlestown in 1955 and in 2015. In 1955, the youngest
age
group
 had the fewest
number
 / amount of
weight
 issues, with more than 70% of 20-29-year-olds being assessed as having a healthy
weight
. In the same year, excess
weight
 was only a significant
problem
 among 40-49-year-olds, 20-30% of whom were classified as either overweight or obese. In fact, being
underweight
 was a more significant
problem
 affecting more than twenty
percent
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 /
percentage
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 of each
age
group
, and the elderly
in particular
, with 40% of the over
60s
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the 60s
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 being classified as
underweight
. In stark contrast to
this
,
for
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/ in 2015, being
underweight
 was only a
problem
 among 20-29-year olds, with 20% obtaining
this
 diagnosis, and the
number
 of
underweight
 elderly people had fallen by /
to
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10%. The charts clearly show that, in modern times, obesity poses a considerable
problem
 from the
age
 of 30 upwards. In fact, there was a steadily / steady increase in
this
problem
 in almost every
age
group
 over 29 until the
age
 of 60, when the vast majority are considered to have an unhealthy
weight
. It is important to note that, by the
age
 of 60, less than 50% of each
age
group
 was considered to have a perfect
weight
 by the year 2015.
This
 is a fall
in
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/ of 10% compared
of
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to
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 / to the same
age
group
 in 1955. When compared / comparing the two years,
it is clear that
 there has been a significant increase in /
of
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the
number
 of obese people in Charlestown, and there was a general drop
of
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 / in the
number
 of
underweight
 people between 1955 and 2015.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words weight, age, group, number, problem, underweight with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 3 times.
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