COins and paper money will soon be replaced by credit and back cards. DO you agree or disagree that eventually we will have a cashless society which will be safer and more convenient for everyone?

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Gone are the days when everyone used to carry cash with them.In contemporary times, people prefer using credit or debit

cards

for their daily account transactions.

According to

my opinion, going completely cashless is not practically feasible.

This

essay will discuss my perspective.

To begin

with, nobody can deny that carrying currency in your pockets is prone to be stolen, but we all are well aware of ATM fraud which is one of the most serious

cybercrime

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. It is

also

quite difficult to control. For

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instance, my paternal uncle's account got debited because some fraudsters called him and asked about his debit card details and he too told him about his

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number.

This

incident happened approximately 3 months ago.Till now,

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and cops are unable to find the victim.

Thus

, it is not safe to use these

cards

without proper knowledge.Considering a nation like India, where illiteracy late is on the higher side, using paperless currency is a very bad idea.

Also

, there are certain situations when

due to

network or server unavailability, Credit or debit

cards

do not work. To exemplify,

last

month, I went to a shopping mall with my family, I thought I

will

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pay expenses by swiping

card

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my card

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point

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of sales machine.

But unfortunately

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, there

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some

back end

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issues and my card stopped working.

This

situation made me gloomy. Now, I always carry some physical cash

along with

plastic money so as to avoid any

further

inconvenience.

To conclude

, though use of cash should be minimal on a regular basis.

But

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relying completely on plastic currency like ATM

cards

is not a good option as some barriers associated with safety and convenience are always there.

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task response

Your essay does not fully address the prompt given. You have discussed the safety and convenience issues related to using credit and debit cards, but you could have provided more arguments for or against a cashless society. Make sure to clearly present your stance on the topic and support it with relevant points.

coherence and cohesion

The logical structure of your essay is weak. Try to organize your ideas more coherently by having a clear introduction, body paragraphs with supporting examples, and a conclusion that restates your main points. Use transition words to connect your ideas smoothly and improve the flow of your essay.

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Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

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Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
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Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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5 paragraphs

281 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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