The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types between 2000 and 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types between 2000 and 2009.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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the percentage of students registered in four types of
schools
. The survey was done on specialist, grammar, voluntary-controlled, and
community
schools
in 2000, 2005, and 2009.
Overall
, the
students’
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attendance depicted the proportion of
community
schools
had an upward trend
while
other pupils became reluctant to attend
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other types during the research time. In these
years
, specialist
schools
witnessed an almost steady trend
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. Grammar
schools
’ pupils’ registration
also
decreased and became half during
this
period. Twenty-four
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of students were keen to be in these
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types
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of
schools
in 2000
however
, it went down to 12% in 2009. The condition for voluntary-controlled
schools
was different from the others. These types of
schools
had the most pupils number among others in 2009
although
it plunged to 20% in the
last
year.
This
depicted
community
schools
became more popular in these
years
due to
their considerable upward attendance trend from 12 to 58
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in 2000 to 2009, respectively. In the first
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most of the students wanted to be in voluntary-controlled
schools
while
the
community
schools
reached them and took their share during
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years
.
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