today more people are travelling than ever before. why is this the case? what are the benefits of travelling for the travelers?

It is often to
said
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say
that, in the modern
world people
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world, people
are prefer
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are preferring
prefer
are preferred
to
travelling
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travel
than ever before.
However there
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However, there
are many reasons to
travel
over the places or countries.
Although
in
this
essay will
explan
make plain and comprehensible
explain
not only the
advantages but
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advantages, but
also
disadvantagesof
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disadvantages of
travelling. In my think way, there are many reason
totravellng
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
people.Nowadays we
infrastractur
the basic structure or features of a system or organization
infrastructure
facilllity
a building or place that provides a particular service or is used for a particular industry
facility
developments, like road developments,
commercilation
the act of commercializing something; involving something in commerce
commercialization
commercialisation
, as well as globalization
also
reason for for more travelling than before. Some people
travel
to spend their
leasur
time available for ease and relaxation
leisure
time for
hobby
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hobbies
a hobby
the hobby
.Not only that those who suffer from inside rooms, but
also people want to
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people also want to
improve their knowledge about
world
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the world
can
travel
and have more fun and knowledge.There are many
adavantages
the quality of having a superior or more favorable position
advantages
from
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of
travelling.
For
instance people
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instance, people
can develop their
buisness
a commercial or industrial enterprise and the people who constitute it
business
by
familiear
well known or easily recognized
familiar
families
with the people of other countries.
On the other hand
, they can
getting
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get
knowledge about other cultures and trades. Considering above that and can be concluded people are receiving
many benifits
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the many benefits
many benefits
of travelling.
More over
in addition
Moreover
, there are some benefits
from
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of
travelling. For instant people are very
interest
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interesting
interested
to
travel
and enjoy their life. They are
keeoing
conformity or harmony
keeping
some memories
with
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to
themselves by taking
photoes
a representation of a person or scene in the form of a print or transparent slide; recorded by a camera on light-sensitive material
photos
and some
sweniears
older; higher in rank; longer in length of tenure or service
seniors
souvenirs
sweetness
. In
this
way, we can conclude the advantages of travelling.
On the other hand
, we can view travelling have many disadvantages
also
. Some of them are getting bad cultural
habbits
an established custom
habits
and expose to dangerous
dieseslike
aids. For more over
cost
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the cost
of travelling is very high and
also
some
illeagle
prohibited by law or by official or accepted rules
illegal
goods are
approching
of the relatively near future
approaching
preaching
approving
to the countries.
Further more people
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Furthermore, people
Furthermore people
have to
spent
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spend
lot
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a lot
lots
of time to
travell
change location; move, travel, or proceed, also metaphorically
travel
place to place. In my view is
,
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,
these
reason
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reasons
are reduce
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are reducing
are reduced
their
choise
the person or thing chosen or selected
choice
case
choices
to
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for
of
travelling. In
conclution
a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
conclusions
cancellation
of, analysis of that topic, travelling is not only the more
important but
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important, but
also
very interesting and helpful to people
on
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in
the modern world. In my
openion
a personal belief or judgment that is not founded on proof or certainty
opinion
is people have
todo
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to do
more travelling with protecting
there
of them or themselves
their
their their
disadvantaged.,
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