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The given table chart illustrates, the
production
 of
potatoes
 in
million
tonnes
 and how much quantity
of
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consumed by the pupils in
kg
 per
person
 in five continents of the world in the year 2006.
Overall
, European people consumed more
potatoes
 as compared to other regions,
however
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 African consumed lesser in numbers. On the other side, Asia was the biggest producer of
this
 crop
whereas
, South and Central America was the region, where
potatoes
 grow lesser in numbers. In the year 2006, Asian people produced 131.2
million
tones
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tonnes
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potatoes
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of potatoes
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, but
they
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consumption
 was 25.8
kg
 per
person
. In Europe, 126.3
million
tonnes
 of
potatoes
 were produced and took
the
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second
 place in the world, but in terms of
consumption
, European people consumed 96.1
kg
 per
person
potatoes
 in
same
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the same
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 year. In North
American
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America
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,
consumption
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the consumption
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 of
potatoes
 was more than twofold that of
production
.
Consumption
 of
potatoes
 in
kg
 per
person
 in South and Central America was 23.6 and their
production
 was 15.6
million
tonnes
 only.
However
,
Consumption
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the Consumption
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 of
potatoes
 in
kg
 per
person
 and
production
 of
potatoes
 in
million
tonnes
 in the African region was 14.1 and 16.4 respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, potatoes, million, tonnes, kg, person, consumption with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Statistical analysis, discrepancy, trend, proportion, demographic, quantitative, qualitative
  • Benchmark, comparative data, data set, statistical significance
  • Implications, socioeconomic factors, literacy rates, unemployment figures
  • Data collection, methodology, sample size, margin of error, credibility
  • Correlation, causation, inference, extrapolate
  • Disenfranchised groups, minority populations, vulnerable sectors
  • Subjective perspective, objective interpretation, bias
  • Contrarian view, rebuttal, two-sided argument
  • Projection, forecasting, predictive analytics
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