The graphs below show the types of music albums purchased by people in Britain according to s3x and age. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The graphs below show the types of music albums purchased by people in Britain according to s3x and age.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
The charts illustrate the information about the type of
music
albums
purchased by different age groups of both male and female British populations. The survey was conducted by s3x, which included
pop
,
rock
and classical
music
.
Overall
, most
of
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British elder
people
preferred classical
music
compared to
pop
and
rock
music
. 25-30 age group
people
are interested in all kinds of
music
. Males contributed to huge
sales
than
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a woman
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woman
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in all kinds of
music
. Youth
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aged between 16 and 24 are highly interested in
pop
and
rock
music
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contributed around 30% of
sales
in each. Middle aged
people
aging
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from 25 to 35 are the
people
who brought most
pop
and
rock
music
albums
with over 30% of whole
sales
in both areas. Elder
people
aging
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more than 45 contributed very less compared to
people
aging
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below 45 and above 35 in
pop
and
rock
music
sales
.
On the other hand
, classical
music
albums
are more popular among older
people
of
age
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group above 45 with almost 20% of total
sales
.
This
was followed by 25-35 aged
people
with around 15% of
sales
.
People
aging
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between 16 to 24 and between 35-44 showed very little in buying classical
music
albums
as they both contributed less than 5% of
sales
. Males contributed to approximately 10%, 10% and 5% higher
sales
than females in
pop
,
rock
and classical
albums
respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words music, albums, pop, rock, people, sales with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph representation
  • categorized
  • predominant
  • disparities
  • similarities
  • age-related preferences
  • noticeable trends
  • age brackets
  • wider appeal
  • demographics
  • speculate
  • resurgence
  • vinyl records
  • digital streaming
  • music genres
  • albums purchases
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