Some people think that money is the best gift for teenagers. Others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

We can often hear from friends 'Why did you give him it? It would be better for you to
gift
him
money
instead
of
this
useless thing'. Based on
this
I think we can split all the people into two parts. The ones who believe that
money
is the best option. And the ones who think that the personal
gift
is more convenient as a
gift
. Let's try to justify each side of the question. Why
money
could be more useful for anyone, including teenagers? We can
say
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easily see that
money
could
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be converted
to
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almost anything.
Definitely
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this
is the advantage of gifting the
money
.
Also
, the
money
could help achieve the goals that no one knows except the person who
were
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given the
money
. That works especially for teenagers, because quite often we don'
t
know their wishes a
priory
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. So, summing everything up, we can say that gifting the
money
provides more freedom. On the other side gifting the
money
could have
the
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disadvantages too. Teenagers can spend them quite fast on things they don'
t
need or buy something that can be dangerous for them to use.
For example
guns, drugs, cigarettes etc. Despite
of
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all
freedom
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the freedom
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that
money
provides personal
gift
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gifts
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can be used to create unique memories.
Also
, if you know the person very well you can
gift
a useful thing and it will be surprising. We can'
t
point out that giving a particular
gift
to someone saves him from wasting
money
on bad things. In conclusion, I think both
money
and
particular
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a particular
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thing could be a good
gift
. If you don'
t
know what you should buy for anyone you can always split
into
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it into
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two parts.
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