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The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
figure's
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 illustrate the construction and operational features of a Wave-Energy Machine when installed in different locations. The design consists of
a
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two chambers, one container consisting of
the
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mechanical
equipment's
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equipments
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such
 as turbines,
electric
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an electric
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 generator and a common shaft located above the
second
. The
second
 container is to contain water from the
waves
. The fluid levels rise
accordingly
 to the intensity of the
waves
 moving opposite
to
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their native direction. The air from the
top most
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topmost
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 vent is pushed through the first
turbine
 and
then
 through the lower enclosure interlinked by a common shaft.
Also
, the
air flow
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airflow
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 from the lower cavity is pushed to the lower
turbine
 connected to the generator and on the rotation of
turbine
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the turbine
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 the electrical energy is generated by the generator depending upon the rotation speed of the
turbine
.
Although
 the additional air is pushed out through the exit vent present above. There are two operable locations
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are
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based on
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the height
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the height
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height
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the height
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 of
waves
. The production output is high when installed in large
waves
, though it incurs huge installation
cost
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costs
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, contrary to the other location where the installation cost is less and the output is
also
 low.
To conclude
, the output is proportional
while
 the installation cost is inversely proportional to
the
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the height and intensity of the wave
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waves
 height and intensity.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, second".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words waves, turbine with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "waves" was used 5 times.
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