The graph and table below show average monthly temperatures and average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting main features.
The graph illustrates information about the monthly average
temperatures
in three cities
, London
, New York
and Sydney
and the table shows data about the number of hours of sunshine
in these cities
.
Overall
, Sydney
and New York
received more sunshine
compared to London
. Sydney
received more sunshine
at the start and end of the year
, whereas
the other two cities
received more sunshine
in the mid
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mid-year
year
.
London
and New York
are cooler at the start of the year
till march with an average temperature under 15 degrees
. This
was followed by a rise in the temperature till mid June
, In July Add a hyphen
mid-June
London
and New York
have their highest temperatures
recorded with nearly 20 and 30 degrees
respectively. Then
temperatures
start to decrease till December. January is the coldest month in both the
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apply
cities
.
On the other
hand
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,hand
Sydney
follows different
trend, with Add an article
the different
a different
start
and end of the Correct article usage
the start
year
have
high Wrong verb form
having
temperatures
reaching almost 25 degrees
. However
, Sydney
has cooler June, July and August compared to other
two Correct article usage
the other
cities
. This
is the
where Correct article usage
apply
Sydney
temperature comes below 20 Change noun form
Sydney's
degrees
.
Sydney
and New York
people have more sunny mornings with 2453 and 2535 average annual hours respectively. In contrast
, London
receives less than half of them.Submitted by Goutham on
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words temperatures, cities, london, york, sydney, sunshine, year, degrees with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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