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Media focusses on problems rather than development. To what extent do you agree?

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It is true that in the current era print and electronic media mostly broadcasts news on environmental, social and economic and other issues rather than highlighting
progress
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the progress
 that has been made. It is commonly believed by some people it
is detrimental to people and societies and I completely agree
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is detrimental to people and societies and I completely agreed
is detrimental to people and societies and I completely agree
 with them. To commence, listening to negative news
have
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has
bad impact
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a bad impact
 on the masses. It is a human nature that if people are presented with only dark and gloomy picture of their surroundings, they will ultimately feel frustrated and may suffer from depression and anxiety.
Therefore
, it is crucial that in order to promote positive attitudes, TV and radio ought to on-air reporting about good things rather than bad.
Otherwise
, citizens will lose hope and
this
 can raise statistics of depression patients at hospitals.
For instance
, a study found out that
as a result
 of the most of the reporting comprising of negativity, 50% of the cases of anxiety increased in Pakistan in 2018.
Moreover
, if media focus only on presenting issues about a society or country, it can severely damage the profile of these. Other nations will feel insecure and unsafe those places to visit about which negative reporting is being made.
Consequently
,
this
 can make a bad image of them resultantly, will affect its tourism industry. One best example of
this
, is the news that was broadcasted about the bomb blasts, thefts and other problems in Pakistan.
As a result
, it raised security concerns among foreigners and tourism reduce by 80% in
this
 country. To conclude, I completely agree with
this
 opinion that on-airing negative reporting not only create feelings of frustration among people, but it
also
 has a negative effect on the economy and societies as a whole by distorting their reputation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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