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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely.

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The knowledge that someone gets about something is called
information
. In my opinion, all kinds of
information
, including scientific research, business and academic have to be shared among people in the best interest of human beings. In ancient times, people had very sincere relations among them. They not only shared
information
, but
also
 exchanged goods among them in order to strengthen their relations as well as economy. In the present
world
, everyone is in hurry to lead the
world
 in a specific field.
Information
 sharing is very common nowadays in almost all the field of life like research, business, health and education.
However
, it is important to understand the nature of
information
 while sharing it.
For example
, certain
information
 like those regarding natural disasters, road accidents and harmful diseases require no delay in time.
Such
informations
a message received and understood
information
 must be spread immediately in order to save the lives of certain people. The recent advancements in Science and Technology have turned the whole
world
 into a global village. It has now become essential to share and gain the
information
 about the changing scenario of the
world
. The fastest means of communications like television, computer and the internet have enabled us to spread the urgent
information
 across the globe within microseconds. If the progress of the
world
 keeps in motion with
such
 zeal and zest,
then
 it will be possible to share and receive all the
information
 instantly from each corner of the
world
.
Thus
, in my opinion, all types of
information
 must be shared among people across the
world
,
however persons
Accept comma addition
however, persons
 and institutions sharing
information
 have to be careful about the correctness of what they share as
information
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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