The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart illustrates data about the Underground station passenger count during different times of
a
Correct article usage
the
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day in London.
Overall
, The passenger count fluctuated
according to
the time with early morning and late night
hours
have
Wrong verb form
having
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low
passengers
,
while
the morning and the evening
hours
are the busiest. At 6 am the station opens with 100
passengers
and quickly doubles its figure in one hour. The number of
passengers
rapidly increases to 400 by 8 am.
Following
this
, there was a drastic decline in the
people
Correct quantifier usage
number of people
show examples
for the
next
two
hours
, reaching under 200
passengers
by 10 am.
Next
, the
travellers
Correct quantifier usage
number of travellers
show examples
increased considerably till 2pm
where
Correct word choice
when
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the number was 300.
Then
, for the
next
two
hours
Add a comma
,hours
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the
passengers
Correct quantifier usage
number of passengers
show examples
travelling by metro
declines
Wrong verb form
declined
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rapidly to 100.
Subsequently
, the traveller count surges till 6pm reaching a value of just under 400. After that, despite falling to just above 100 at 8pm, the figure increases slightly in the
next
hour.
Finally
, it decreases slightly to just under 150 by 22
hours
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "next".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, passengers with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rapidly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trips
  • children
  • modes of transport
  • walk
  • cycle
  • public transport
  • drive
  • car
  • trends
  • decrease
  • increase
  • shift
  • convenient
  • comfortable
  • commuting
  • traffic congestion
  • safety concerns
  • significant
  • indicate
  • reasons
  • traffic congestion
  • safety concerns
  • 20-year period
  • doubled
  • considerable margin
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