Some people think that the government should provide assistance to all kinds of artists including painters, musicians and poets, etc. However, other people think that is a waste of money.

Many people’s lives are richer because of
art
– music, paintings, calligraphy, pictures, sculpture, poems and dance. There are some who claim that it is important to support the
artists
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and others who are opposed to
government
funding. In the following paragraphs, I shall discuss both sides of the argument and
finally
give my opinion. There are many reasons why
government
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should fund
artists
. The contributions of
artists
to the society are
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essential.
Art
can bring out people’s creativity, views and personalities.
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, we learn about our history, traditions and culture through movies, songs and paintings made by
artists
.
Artists
are the media of diffusing tradition. All kinds of
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are the basis of a
country
without which the
country
can’t be civilised. So
artists
are the ambassadors of culture and play a vital role in elevating the level of civilization of the
country
. It is a major form of cultural abundance. Another important aspect of
this
is that
art
is an ancient means of communication. Our language is a result of people’s need to communicate.
Art
is what differentiates us from animals.
Art
is our soul and it is a source of courage.
Artists
also
entertain us.
Finally
,
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should fund
artists
because earning a livelihood from
art
is difficult
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in the budding stages. Opponents of
government
funding
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artists
say that
money
spent on the arts could have been used for considerably more vital purposes. They have strong reasons as a nation’s health and wellbeing should be paramount. The idea that elderly people are forced to wait for essential operations whilst the
money
required to increase available medical provision is spent on opera and ballet is plainly immoral. There are
also
more deserving social causes for the
money
that should be considered before the arts. Homelessness, unemployment, illiteracy – all of these deserve to be addressed before
money
is spent on what is essentially little more than entertainment. To summarise, I would like to say that as both sides have strong arguments, it depends on the condition of the
country
. In developed countries where even the poorest of the poor have all the basic amenities of life,
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should spend on
art
and
artists
but in countries where people are dying of starvation and diseases, other matters should be given priority.
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