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Maintaining public libraries are waste of money and resources since internet is now replacing their functions. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#libraries #waste #money #resources #internet #functions
it is irrefutable that
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world wide web
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 is one of the greatest
innovation
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 which has considerably
change
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 the lifestyle of human beings. Many people
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 that
government
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the government
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 should stop spending money
for
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 preserving
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public libraries as everything is digitalized nowadays and can
access
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 from all over the world.I strongly agree with
this
 as extracting or getting
informations
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information
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 from
internet
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 is spontaneous and more convenient.
Firstly
,accessing information from
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internet
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 is more convenient than referring
through
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to
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 different books to get the same .Information related to anything and everything is available
in
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 the
internet
 which ease the tasks of users even if
its
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 for educational or entertainment purpose.
For instance
 ,If a research scholar
want
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 to submit a thesis about
african
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 culture, he can easily get the details from different authenticated websites like
wikipedia
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 and government websites facilitating
this
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 details.
Also
,senior citizens who find it
diffult
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difficult
 to read of
gothrough
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through
 heavy books can take advantage of
internet
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the internet
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 by utilizing the options of big font
size
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 for reading newspapers to get daily updates.
Secondly
,similar to any other
fields
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field
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 the
competion
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competition
 among
the
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internet
 service providers is
also
 increasing day by day which is purely
benefical
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beneficial
 for the consumers.
Introduction
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 of advanced signals provides quick and spontaneous search results without any lagging and users
needs
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 to pay less amount for those services which is far cheaper than getting a library membership.
FOr
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 instance, in India around 85% of
the
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school libraries are replaced with
digitalized
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the digitalized
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library
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libraries
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 for students to surf
internet
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the internet
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 for their academic references
as well as
spending
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 leisure time by knowing more about
the
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world history.
To conclude
,In my
opinion
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 it is not advisable to spend money on outdated public libraries ,
multiple
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as multiple
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 sources of information provided by
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the internet
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internet
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is
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 more reliable and spontaneous.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

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A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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