Some believe in enrolling their children into the best schools so that they learn to socialize while others believe that homeschooling is a better option.Discuss both views and where do you stand on this topic?

In today’s generation children are getting smarter, more socialized and climbing the ladder of success faster.
However
, I partially agree
to
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with
the both given opinions that only best schools can make children more socialize or
home
schooling can educate kids acceptable to their society. I will cite a few facts and examples along with my opinion in below
essay
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the essay
.
To begin
with,
firstly
,
best schools
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the best schools
are famous for giving best
education
and a little bit socialized young generation too.
However
, it comes with heavy school fees and expenses for other social activities in these schools.
Secondly
, we have seen generally, all students from
such
best school are talented but not much open in society and culture.
For example
, DPS and other famous schools, are famous for
best
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the best education
education
, but not for teaching sociology/ social things to their students.
On the other hand
,
home
schooling, is free, there is no cost factor. It can help
in
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with
basic
education
to your kids, not the best
education
to them. Children can grow slowly with
home
education
.
Secondly
, more free time is needed from parents to educate their children at
home
,
that is
less likely available due to jobs and other
home
activities.
For example
, kids can be seen more socialized in small cities, where parents are taking care of their kids in their own way. I would like to go with both the approaches to educate our children, sending them to good schools to get
best
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the best education
education
, as well as, at
home
, teaching, giving time to them, playing and taking them to
outside
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the outside
makes them more socialized. I will conclude
this
essay by stating that, best schools and
home
schooling can
combinedly
make best educated and socialised to every
children
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child
. Parents and society have to play their role respectively
in
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on
this
overall journey.

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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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