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Every day, millions of tons of food are wasted all over the world. Why do you think this is happening? And how can we solve this problem?

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It is clear that
, across the world,
food
wastage
 is a common phenomenon. There are multiple causes for
this
 problem
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this
 is not something that can be solved in a single day. A collective effort is required, both from
government
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the government
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 and citizens to compact
this
 issue. In
this
 essay, I will explore some of the causes
for
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food
wastage
 and propose possible solutions.
Firstly
, In a country like
India
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India,
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 we do not have proper storage facilities and distribution channels for storing perishable items.
As a result
, vegetables like onions and tomatoes, which have very low shelf life
is
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are
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 being wasted or thrown away. To illustrate
this
 point, it has been estimated that every year close to Rs. 100 million worth of
vegetable
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vegetables
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 and fruits are rotting away,
due to
 the lack of proper storage infrastructure. It is important for the government to do a thorough study of the distribution channels for these perishable items and come up with a plan to build facilities to store
such
 items at proper locations across the country.
Furthermore
, every citizen in our country should take responsibility to prevent
food
wastage
 at his/her home.
For instance
, in India, lavish weddings and parties contribute close to 15% of the
food
 wasted every day. It is important that, when we are planning for a function, we should
also
 consider,
means
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the means
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 by which we can distribute the excess leftover
food
. Nowadays,
they
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there
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 are many organizations which can help with
this
.
To sum up
,
food
wastage
 is a major concern in today's society and in my view, both government and individuals should take responsibility to address
this
 issue and start with
solutions
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the solutions
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 proposed above.
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task response
The essay adequately addresses the causes and solutions to food wastage. However, the response does not fully cover all aspects of the task, and some points lack clarity.
coherence and cohesion
The logical structure of the essay is somewhat effective, but the introduction and conclusion could be more clearly defined and the progression of ideas could be smoother.
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