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Nowadays, Many nations receive funds from richer countries,
this
 international aid is highly significant for economically deprived ones;
however
, some experts think that
this
 assistances would bring more damaging effects on these nations than any benefits it might provide. In my opinion, I strongly support
this
 viewpoint.
First
 of all, by providing financial support,
this
 only creates dependency towards those who fund them.
This
 may not be effectively tackled the problems. As a citizen, they do not feel to find solutions for their difficulties, they are continuously getting aid.
By contrast
, if they
are not provided
Suggestion
do not provide
don't provide
 any helps, they would find solutions
for
Suggestion
to
 their challenges of their surroundings and work to overcome it by a joint effort. Take Kenya as an example, which has gotten financial assistance from various countries, but they did not improve their economical status, remain still underdeveloped. Another possible issue here is that several countries are severely corrupted;
therefore
, whatever money they
gets
Suggestion
get
 from international community may not to reach the hands of needy people. In
such
 situations, the rich become rich and the poor become poor, the gap between rich and poor widens.
This
 may not be feasible for a thriving society.
Insted
Suggestion
Instead
 of
this
, experts believe that building educational institutions, hospitals, and
infrastrcutures
the basic structure or features of a system or organization
infrastructure
 would be even better to
suppor
give moral or psychological support, aid, or courage to
support
 poor nations, rather than squandering money for them. By way of conclusion, even though some advocates think that supporting poor countries with money would be better, others think that it can have more damaging effects than any positives. I, personally, again reaffirm that these countries need to be helped by giving training and technical expertise.
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