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in some countries it is thought advisable that children begin formal education at four years old, while in others they do not have to start school until they are sever or eight

#countries #children #education #four #years #school #eight
People in some part of the world
believes
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 that,only by
age
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the age
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 of 4 years ,children should start their former education ;
while
 some stick to the norm that 6 or 7 is the apt
age
 to start their schooling. I totally agree
to
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 the second thought of school that education should start only at the
age
 of 6 or 7.    
Firstly
, in some
countries
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countries,
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 children
are not send
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are not sent
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 to school until the
age
 of 6 or 7 because
that is
age
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the age
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where
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when
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 they should get
right
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the right
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 assistance and care from their family to become
a
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apply
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better human
being
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beings
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.
For instance
 ,in India schooling starts at the
age
 of 6 or 7
therefore
 they get enough
time
 to spend with their family
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,
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especially 
parents
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their parents
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 and grandparents .
This
 quality
time
 can indirectly
bring
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have
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 a great impact on their character and behavior as they get
right
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the right
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 support which is crucial for a better upbringing.    
secondly
 ,childhood is the most amazing and memorable part
in
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of
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ones
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one's
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 life
where
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which
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they
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one
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 can enjoy and later cherish
on
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. In fact,
this
 is the only
time
where
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when
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 they do not have to think of their responsibilities and enjoy the most. As
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a mater
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mater
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matter
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 of fact ,
i
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I
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personally feel that as we grow we have endless responsibilities and enough struggles which we have to go through
however
they
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the
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 only good memories which
last
 long and
hols
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hold
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 up
on
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are our childhood
time
 and how we enjoyed being free.    
To conclude
,by extending
the
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apply
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schooling to
an
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the
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age
 of 6 or 7 , children will get more
time
 with parents and grandparents which
create
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creates
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 a huge impact .
Meanwhile
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 they get enough
time
 to enjoy their childhood which they can cherish later on
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