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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It is often argued that university students should study nothing but majors that will be beneficial in the future,
such
 as those related to
science
 and technology. While there is some truth in that claiming, I find myself inclined to believe that unleashing human’s passion lead to more and more
development
Suggestion
developers
. On the one hand, there is a chief reason why it could be argued that restricting choices in
such
 a decision may be better. From the materialistic angle, unemployment rates are getting higher and higher in our modern societies,
thus
 studying something
more close
Suggestion
closer
 to the doable area than the theoretical one might lead to the possibility of finding a better job and
thus
 building a prestigious career. Despite the above argument, I would side with those who suppose that releasing constrains in
this
 stage of life might be more and
more beneficial
Suggestion
more benefits
.
Initially
, denying the benefits of areas of interests other than
science
 and technology just for the reason that their effects are not obvious is a big illusion.
For instance
, while there are not routine jobs for those who study philosophy, it is considered to be the mother of all fields of knowledge that a man acquired since the beginning of history on
this
 earth. It is more than enough to consider that the most prestigious degree in all universities, the PhD, stands for a doctorate in
philosophy not
Accept comma addition
philosophy, not
 in in
science
 due to the fact that philosophy is the umbrella of
science
. It can be concluded that despite the risk of struggling to find a job, I hold the notion o
f tackli
very attractive; capturing interest
taking
ng that risk for the sake of passion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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