Professional workers like doctors, nurses and teachers make a greater contribution to society and so should be paid more than sports and entertainment personalities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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doctors, nurses
entertainment
characters. In world doctors and nurses treated as gods because they are the people who give another life to a patient. Furthermore
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Furthermore, entertainment
entertainment
personalities also
act a great role for the society
. However in
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I will discuss both views before making a conclusion.
Firstly
, in any emergency doctor and nurses are ready to serve their patient
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patients
mid night
nights 12 o'clock at night; the middle of the night
midnight
also
, they do not work in a fixed time frame. Furthermore their
job is so risky than the other occupations because they are the people who directly dealing with the human life. If there is serious surgery, doctors and nurses should pay more attention towards the patient. Accept comma addition
Furthermore, their
Hence
doctors and nurses should pay more salary because of their higher contribution
to society
.
In addition
to that engineers, teachers also
do
greater engage in
make
contribution
to society
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example teachers
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behaviors
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Furthermore
the engineers also
do
greater effort to make engage in
make
better
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a better society
society
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a delayed construction project need to do more Suggestion
on
nightshifts
in order to complete Suggestion
night shifts
project
. By considering all above factors professional workers should be paid more.
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projects
On the other hand
sports and entertainment
personalities like musicians also
do
a engage in
make
contribution
to society
. They are the people who support to reduce the stress of a busy people
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example Susanthika Jayasooriya who won the medals in Olympic should be paid more. Suggestion
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cases government
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cases, government
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needs
also
they need to give a value to her effort to get the medal.
Finally
, after considering the all
above mentioned points my point of view is the professionals who do more risky jobs should be paid more than the Suggestion
after considering all the
entertainment
personalities. In addition
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entertainment
programs. For those people all should pay money after considering their contribution
to the society
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