Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some people think that free social
activities
should be a mandatory part of high school
programs. While
students
who take part in these activities
may face some unexpected issues, I agree that educators should design required community
services
for their high school
students
without any payments. On the one hand, the most considerable trouble affects
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that affects
students
when participating in public activities
is the shortage of time. Particularly, they may be less focused on their core lessons in class, even
lack leisure time because of spending too much time Correct word choice
and even
for
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on
community
services
. Besides
, there are obligatory services
which do not suit to
everyone. Change preposition
apply
For example
, working for a charity at
mountainous places or suburban areas requires Change preposition
in
students
to have to go far away or teaching sports to younger children at outdoor
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an outdoor
stadium
demands Fix the agreement mistake
stadiums
a
good health. All of these types of work do not fit Remove the article
apply
to
the weak girls or unhealthy Remove the preposition
apply
students
. On the other hand
, attending unpaid public services
will bring great benefits to high school
students
. Firstly
, these programs create a positive environment for students
to be raised in a holistic way, not only improving their social knowledge but also
motivate
their perception Wrong verb form
motivating
about
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of
the
outdoor life. Correct article usage
apply
This
is really an appropriate method to train them on how to work for the interest of community
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the community
instead
of living only for themselves. Secondly
, taking part in public activities
such
as volunteer campaigns and charity organizations is a highlighted point which makes their resume brilliant. If an applicant who has the same qualification
, as well as experiences with other candidates, would like to apply for a scholarship or a competitive job, his past Fix the agreement mistake
qualifications
activities
for the interest of community
may make an outstanding contribution in helping him defeat the others. In conclusion, Add an article
the community
although
there are some disadvantages, it seems to me that we should design more unpaid obligatory community
programs for high school
students
.Submitted by teachberryenglish on
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