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The tables below give information abou sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The tables below give information abou sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given tables have been divided into two columns, each of which represents some information regarding how much money was earned from sailing coffee and
bananas
 in five developed countries in 1999 and 2004.
It is clear that
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 the highest amount of revenue
of
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 coffee related to the UK in 2004,
whereas
, Switzerland had the most sales of
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bananas
 in both years. In terms of coffee,
UK
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 experienced
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significant growth
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 around 18
million
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euros
. It was followed by Switzerland, there was a 2-fold growth from 3 to 6
million
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euros
. The rest of the countries faced a negligible rise
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 around
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0.2million
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0.2 million
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 for Denmark and Sweden and 0.7
million
euro
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euros
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 for Belgium. When it comes to
bananas
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 place was related to Switzerland, the income of
bananas
 has soared from 15 to 47
million
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euros
. The
second
 best sailing was UK and Belgium, they witnessed an increasing around
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4
million
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euros
. There is an
opposed
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 trend for Sweden and Denmark, both
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two
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 countries saw a steady fall
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 approximately 1
million
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euros
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bananas, million, euros with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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