The graph below shows how money was spent on differentforms of entertainment.
The chart provides
the
information about world-entertainment markets during the five years.
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it
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on
the picture the United States are the chief contributor of media in the entertainment Change preposition
in
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the
world. In 2000 the volume of television, publishing and music doubled, remaining the US on the top of the list with 257 Correct article usage
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billion
dollars
spent.
Asia and Europe demonstrated almost the same results in 1995 and 2000.They have similar
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a similar
tendency
in television and publishing - Fix the agreement mistake
tendencies
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an upwarding
upwarding
trend is reflected. Approximately 50 Correct your spelling
upward
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billion
dollars
for tv for both and 60 billion
dollars
and 40 billion
dollars
for music consequently
.
Thus
, the US citizens spent 2,5 times more money for
amusementChange preposition
on
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