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The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000

The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000
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The chart shows
average
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 distances that people in England travelled by using different forms of
transport
 in the years 1985 and 2000. It is evident that the total number of
miles
 travelled by English people using all types of
transport
 increased significantly between 1985 and 2000. The car was by far the most used form of
transport
 in both years. In 1985, the average distance travelled by car was 3,199
miles
, and
this
 rose to 4,806
miles
 in the
year
 2000. The figures for
long distance
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long-distance
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bus
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buses
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,
train
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trains
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,
taxi
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taxis
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 and
other type
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another type
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 of
transport
 experienced an increase from 1985 to 2000. Taxi saw the most significant change, with more than a threefold increase from 13
miles
 per person per
year
 in 1985 to 42
miles
 per person per
year
 in 2000. There was a fall in the average distance for three types of
transports
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transport
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; walking, bicycle and local bus. In 1985,
average
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the average
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 walking by an English person was 255
miles
 per
year
in
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1985, but it fell by 18
miles
 in 2000.
Similarly
, an Engish travelled 51
miles
 by bike in 1985, and it dropped to 41
miles
 in 2000.
While
an
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English travelled 429
miles
annual
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 in 1985 by using the local bus, it fell to 274
miles
 per
year
 in 2000, and it is the biggest downward trend that was seen in all types of
transport
.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words transport, miles, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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