The chart below shows the results of a survey of people who visited four types of tourist attraction in Britain in the year 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

#results #survey #people #four #tourist #attraction #britain #year #summarise #information #features #comparisons

The pie chart illustrates the proportion of people who visited four

diffent

Correct your spelling

different

touist

Correct your spelling

tourist

place

Change to a plural noun

places

show examples

in Britain during

year

Change the article

the year

show examples

1999. The table show percentage of people who visited 5

theme

park during

same

Add an article

the same

show examples

year.

Overall

, it can be seen that

theme

park was the most famous tourist attraction

while

wildlife

parks

and zoos had the lowest percentage during 1999.

According to

the survey,

theme

park

Fix the agreement mistake

parks

show examples

, museums and

galleris

Correct your spelling

galleries

were the most popular destinations. They both in all contributed to more than 60

percent

Change the spelling

per cent

show examples

where

theme

parks

had 38

percent

Change the spelling

per cent

show examples

where as 37

percent

Change the spelling

per cent

show examples

was of museums and galleries. Historic houses and Monuments had 16%

while

wildlife

parks

and zoos

was

Change the verb form

were

show examples

the

most

Change the adjective

apply

show examples

least favourite tourist spot it was only 9%. AS

theme

parks

had the highest

Correct quantifier usage

number of visiters

show examples

visiters

Correct your spelling

visitors

show examples

but only Blackpool Pleasure Beach had the most significant proportion which is 47

percent

Change the spelling

per cent

show examples

where

Correct word choice

whereas

show examples

legoland

Change the capitalization

Legoland

show examples

windsor

Change the capitalization

Windsor

show examples

and

chessington

Change the capitalization

Chessington

show examples

world of adventures were the lowest with 10

percent

Change the spelling

per cent

show examples

Submitted by nandkishorjagtap58 on Wed Dec 11 2019

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".

▼

Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.

▼

Vocabulary: Replace the words theme, parks, percent with synonyms.

▼

Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.

▼

Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.

▼

Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

▼

Do you want to check your IELTS writing?

Submit unlimited essays, letters and charts. Sign up right now and start improving your writing skills.

3Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
3Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
20Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

155 words

5.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 checks
Get all the feedback you need to keep improving your charts and letters.
Unlimited Task 2 checks
Practice and perfect your skills with essays.
Personalized suggestions
Know how to boost your score.
Detailed mistakes analysis
Get instant feedback. Spot every mistake.
Topic ideas generator
Get topic-specific ideas to enhance your writing.
Vocabulary helper
Get the right words for any topic.
Progress tracking
Track your writing improvements.

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

6.5
band
In companies, promotions to high positions should be given to employees inside a company and not to someone outside the company or new hiring. What is your opinion on this?
Some people argue that employee advancement to higher role ought to be granted from within the company, not people recruited from outside of the company. I think there are various reasons for the employer will be given and explain in the following essay.
<4
band
Some people think that in the modern world we are more dependent on each other, while others think that people have become more independent. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
One of the social concerns today relates to people’s dependence. While it is widely believed that in the modern world we are more dependent on each other. Others argue that people have been more independent. In my opinion, human aren’t dependent on each other these day
7.5
band
You are going to study in a college in the UK next year. You would like to stay in a college Hall of Residence. Write a letter to the college. In your letter explain your accommodation requirements explain what your food needs are ask what alternatives are available if they cannot provide what you want You should write at least 150 words.
I have recently been accepted to study at Marriot College for the coming academic year and would be very grateful if I could check a few details with you before making the move.
7.5
band
The best way to improve road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving cars and motorbikes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In the quest for enhanced traffic safety, some people propose that elevating the minimum legal age for driving cars and motorbikes is a pragmatic measure that deserves careful consideration. In my opinion, I strongly disagree with this view.
6.5
band
Some people believe that students should be studying all the mandatory subjects till 10, while others believe that they should have an option to select favourite subjects to study. Discuss both views and give your opinion?
Education is an important part of one's life, It not only shapes our future but also decides our country's tomorrow. Based on the individual's point of views, some believe that students should learn all the mandatory subjects till 10, whereas, others oppose the above statement. Before making my own opinion, I would like to unfold both sides of the topic and then provide my view.

The chart below shows the results of a survey of people who visited four types of tourist attraction in Britain in the year 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

In companies, promotions to high positions should be given to employees inside a company and not to someone outside the company or new hiring. What is your opinion on this?

Some people think that in the modern world we are more dependent on each other, while others think that people have become more independent. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

The best way to improve road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving cars and motorbikes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe that students should be studying all the mandatory subjects till 10, while others believe that they should have an option to select favourite subjects to study. Discuss both views and give your opinion?