The chart below shows the amount of money per week spent on fast foods in Britain. The graph shows the trends in consumption of fast foods. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The chart below shows the amount of money per week spent on fast foods in

Britain. The graph shows the trends in consumption of fast foods.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
The chart presented below illustrates the
money
(in pence), one
britain
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Britain
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person used on fast
foods
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food
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in one week.
Overall
, the chart shows that those
britains
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Britains
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who have high income spent more
pences
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pence
on different fast foods (
Hamburgers
,
Fish
and
Chips
, Pizza) as compared to those who have low income. The graph presents the
overall
consumption
of fast food in
grammes
in the period of two decades (1970 to 1990). The chart which shows the
money
spend
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spent
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on fast food evaluates that people who have high income spent most of their
money
on
hamburgers
(over 40
percent
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per cent
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)
while
they spent
least
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the least
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money
on
fish
and
chips
(under 20
percnt
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per cent
)
however
for pizza they spent slightly under 20
pences
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pence
pieces
which means more than
fish
and
chips
. The trend
of
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in
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consumption
of fast food illustrated in
graph
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the graph
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shows that from 1970 to 1990 the
consumption
of both
hamburgers
and pizzas
have
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has
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rise
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risen
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upto its maximum
grammes
(just under 100 to over 500
grammes
for
hamburgers
) and (well under 100 to wee over 200
grammes
for pizza).
On
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In
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contrast to
this
consumption
in
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of
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fish
and
chips
is
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declined from about 300 to approximately 200 from 1970 to around 1987 and
then
again rise but in
very
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a very
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small amount.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 90%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words money, hamburgers, fish, chips, consumption, grammes with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "presented" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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