The diagram below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The diagram illustrates the life cycle of salmon fish in 3 major stages, from being an egg to

grow

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growing

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into an

adult

salmon.

Overall

, baby

salmons

who

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which

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hatch from eggs that are kept below the reeds, transform into

adult

salmons

during

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over

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a period of 9

years

Moreover

, in

this

duration, they constantly change their locations as they grow up.

Salmons

hatch from

miniscule

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minuscule

eggs, which are located in the

slow moving

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slow-moving

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upper river, under the small stones and the reeds. The hatching process takes a period of 5-6 months and the salmon fledgelings are known as 'fry'. They are only 3-8 cm in length and they move from the upper river to a

fast flowing

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fast-flowing

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lower river, where they live for approx 4

years

. After 4

years

, they grow up to become 'smolt'

are

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and are

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approximately 12-15 cm in size. Smolts generally survive in

open

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the open

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sea for a striking period of 5

years

. Eventually, smolts transform into

adult

salmons

that

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which

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are

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huge in size at about 70-76 cm.

Adult

salmons

are found in the upper rivers as they prefer

slow moving

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slow-moving

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waters that serve as their breeding grounds to lay eggs in the reeds.

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