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Global warming is one of the biggest threats humans face in the 21st Century and sea levels are continuing to rise at alarming rates.  What problems are associated with this and what are some possible solutions.

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0ne of the biggest problems that
world
Suggestion
the world
 is dealing with is the global warming and it becomes a significant threat to the entire humanity. Scientists in association scholars, politicians are doing researches on the underlying causes and working out the possible solutions. The fact is that the average temperature keeps rising and it brings the unwanted droughts. The increasing temperature
cause
Suggestion
causes
 the glaciers in the polar regions to melt
,
Accept space
,
which
consequently
 results in a serious rise of the sea levels.
This
 in turn results in the flood of the world's coastal areas.
Moreover
, the availability of the fresh water for the entire biosphere are decreasing since the majority of fresh water is reserved in the form of glaciers and the melting of those glaciers and their transformation into sea water is a potential threat. Habitat loss is the another result of Global warming.
For instance
, polar bears are losing their habitats due to the melting of the glacier. The continuously changing climate results in the abnormal circadian clocks are the species that cannot be adapted to
this
 new climate pattern will have a very high potential to be extinct. There are many possible solutions proposed
to
Suggestion
for
 these problems. One of the major cause of Global warming is the excessive carbon emission and industrially oriented living styles. Moving towards a more green economy
such
 as reducing the excessive farming, using alternative energy source and

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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