The diagram below show how leather goods are produced.

The diagram below show how leather goods are produced.
The diagram illustrates the production of
the
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leather goods through 11 steps starting from drying the material till the production of bags and shoes.
Firstly
, the animal skin is dried under the sunshine at a particular temperature.
However
, after drying it, the skin is sent to the factory through lorries and trucks, and from here
this
material is washed using a mixture of lime and water, in order to remove the impurities.
This
purified material is
then
soaked in lime for a particular period of time, and
then
flattened using a machine.
Moreover
,
this
material is
then
soaked into tannin which is a mixture of water and vegetable matter.
However
,
this
soaked material is later sent for polishing so that the material becomes shiny and perfect for use.
Furthermore
,
this
polished material is transported to the leather factory by trucks and lorries.
Finally
,
this
leather from the factory manufactures shoes, bags, footwear
as well as
sports materials.

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