in many countries today insufficient respect is shown to older people. what do you think maybe the reason for this? what problems might this cause in society?

Nowadays, in the majority of
countries
Add a comma
countries,
show examples
the way
people
are treating
Wrong verb form
treat
show examples
their elders Particularly older
people
show
Correct subject-verb agreement
shows
show examples
a lack of respect.There are a few reasons
Change preposition
for
show examples
This
pattern of behaviour. First and foremost, some
people
think of
geriatric
Add an article
a geriatric
the geriatric
show examples
class as a burden on
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
society. The cause of their age, they cannot work anymore and
age related
Add a hyphen
age-related
show examples
health problems
also
Spike which demands a lot of effort from both the family and the government since they have To provide pension and hospice care to a certain degree. Development in health Sciences resulted in increased lifespan, which directly correlates to the years of A burden on society, leading to some form of resentment.
On the other hand
, negative influences on young and impressionable minds May it be from movies or the internet or peers,
leading
Wrong verb form
lead
show examples
them astray resulting in arrogance and
deliqueny
Correct your spelling
delinquency
. So
people
who fall victim to them cannot live up to their full potential and their contribution to society will
also
be minimal. In extreme cases
Add a comma
,
show examples
it may lead to criminal behavior.
To sum up
, the way elders are being treated has changed drastically leaning towards disrespect during these past two decades
eihter
Correct your spelling
either
due to
unwillingness
Correct article usage
the unwillingness
show examples
of the old
people
to change or maybe
its
Correct pronoun usage
apply
show examples
because the children think their elders are a burden on them requiring constant care and attention.
But
Correct word choice
However
show examples
however
,
people
keep forgetting that they have to walk in their shoes someday and they better treat them right or face cosmic justice.
Submitted by teja.k2011 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • intergenerational relationships
  • nuclear families
  • extended family
  • youth-centric
  • technological advancements
  • workforce participation
  • healthcare systems
  • social isolation
  • generational divide
  • societal role
  • elderly care
  • mental well-being
What to do next:
Look at other essays: