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Now-a-days many people choose to be self-employed, rather than work for a company. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantage of being self-employed?

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Dear Jay, I’m writing to let you know that I completely empathize with the issue you are currently facing at work in your new Job at France. I did face a similar situation with my previous employer. Let me explain the problems I faced in detail to you. I was employed
with
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 one of the technology giants and was quite satisfied with my work overall, but I did my own share of challenges once I had to travel to Germany for my on-site assignment. All my
team mates
a fellow member of a team
teammates
 were used
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in
their native language both
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both their native language
 for daily conversations and formal meetings. I was quite worried as it was hampering my performance and ability to convey my ideas to other team members. I took
this
 as a challenge and followed a two-way approach by requesting them to use English for formal communication and started learning basic German on the other side. Could I recommend you follow a similar approach for your problem? In the short term, your team will understand and ensure English is used for official work and in the long term, you will get a fair understanding of French. I look forward to hearing from you on my suggestions. Write back soon, Chris
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