The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.
The tables compare the percentages of British university
students
who spoke different
languages
in addition
to English in two separate years. It is noticeable that in both years, 2000 and 2010, the majority of British
students
at the university in question were able to speak at least one other language. We can
also
see an increase in the
proportion
of
second
and
third language
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speakers
over the 10-year period. In the year 2000, 80% of the
students
were able to speak one or two foreign
languages
, and 20% only spoke English. Ten years later, there was a rise of 5% in the
proportion
of those who spoke a
second
language. There was
also
an increase, from 10% to 15%, in the
proportion
of
students
who were able to speak two foreign
languages
. Looking at the specific
second
languages
spoken, in 2000, 30% of the
students
were able to speak Spanish, 15% spoke French, and 10% spoke German. By 2010, the
proportion
of Spanish
speakers
had risen to 35%, there were 5% fewer French
speakers
, and the figure for German
speakers
remained at one in ten.
Finally
, we can see that the percentage of
speakers
of other
second
languages
, apart from Spanish, French and German, rose from 15% to 20% over the period shown

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • British students
  • university
  • speaking other languages
  • language proficiency
  • overall trends
  • comparison
  • 2000
  • 2010
  • chart
  • data
  • percentage
  • significant
  • increase
  • decrease
  • noteworthy
  • comparative analysis
  • improvement
  • decline
  • conclusion
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