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Some people think that watching sport is a waste of leisure time. Do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
 agile world, it is hard to get some leisure
time
, should an individual
spend
Suggestion
spends
 precious, hard earned free
time
 in watching
sport
 has sparked a series of heated arguments between critics and experts.
However
, in my opinion I strongly believe that watching
sport
 is far better than watching daily soaps and cartoons if one decides to spend their leisure
time
 in front of the television. In
this
 essay, I will provide illustrations from The Times Newspaper and Government of USA. Since the beginning of
time
, it
is observed
Suggestion
has been observed
 clearly that peoples’ behaviour reflects on what they perceive. Watching
sport
 not only entertaining, but it
also
 secondarily injects teaches some of the key aspects of life like
team work
cooperative work done by a team (especially when it is effective)
teamwork
, sportsmanship, honesty, discipline and so on. In a recent survey from Government of USA shows that 90% of Americans gained the valuable art of team work just by watching football.
Sport
 not only teaches positive things about the
perception but
Accept comma addition
perception, but
 it
also
 acts as a key player when it comes to bringing motivation. In today’s era, because of
recent boom
Suggestion
the recent boom
a recent boom
 in technology sector people are getting lazy and started developing progressive hatred towards physical work. In monthly The Times Newspaper’s research column it was mentioned that among the group of part-
time
 professional athletes, 85% of them got
motivation
Suggestion
the motivation
 to pursue sports as secondary career just by watching sports. To summarise all the arguments and discussions, it can be clearly concluded that
instead
 spending leisure
time
 in watching daily soaps and cartoons, watching
sport
 not only entertaining but it
also
 provides benefits to the ones watching it.
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