The graph below shows the consumption of fish and different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The given graph illustrates information about the number of grams per person consumed in a variety of food
such
as fish, meat, beef, lamb and chicken, which had taken a place in a European country in a period of years from 1979 until 2004. It can be clearly seen from the graph the fish had
a constant stable figures
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constant stable figures
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over the years.
According to
what
seen
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between 1979 and 1989, beef contributed the highest proportion of consumable foods about 230 and 240 grams, respectively, after that
showd
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showed
show
shows
a significant drop to reach the lowest in 2004 at about 150. Chichen was eaten in 1979
by
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at
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150 grams per person and
then
it starts to be a food choice for most
of
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the
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people in 2004 was 250 g/person. In comparison, lamb at the first was much higher than
the
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chicken
than
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then
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showed a rapid decrease by the end of the period to reach 90.
To sum up
, the most
foods
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food
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were
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eaten by
the
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people was
the
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chicken
especially
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,especially
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in 2004.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • metric tons
  • fluctuations
  • upward/downward trend
  • stabilize
  • peak
  • trough
  • overtake
  • steady decline/increase
  • sustainable
  • dietary habits
  • preferences
  • health consciousness
  • per capita
  • poultry
  • veal
  • stagnant
  • gradual
  • surpass
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