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The maps below show the center of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the center of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given diagrams illustrate information about the
centre
 named Islip located in
the
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a
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 small town and the future renovation plan. It can be clearly seen from the maps huge transformation will be occurred after redevelopment.
According to
the
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apply
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what is shown
tow
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two
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 new accommodations will be built, one in the same area
of
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as
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 the old houses just opposite
to
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apply
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the park and the other one on the north side of the
centre
. Car parking and
bus
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a bus
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 station will be available
after
this
 huge renovation and they will be located beside the shopping
centre
.
In addition
, the plan to surround the
centre
 with the main road, both
school
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the school
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 and the shopping
centre
 remained the same except the shopping mall moved a little bit to the left side
while
 the
park
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parking
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 area becomes smaller than before.
To sum up
, we could say that the
centre
 in the future will be more attractive and easy to access
it
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apply
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by the people.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words centre with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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