Many people believe that scientific research should be carried out and controlled by the governments rather than private companies. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

People assume that scientific
research
is supposed to be supervised by the
government
instead
of the private organization. I personally, share a similar view with
this
statement with the reasons stated below. Many reasons can clarify the essential part of the
government
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role to control scientific studies. First of all, various
research
activities are carried out by private companies
such
as pharmaceutical companies to produce a new remedy for a certain illness.
This
leads to exclusive
claim
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for the medication by a sole company merely for the sake of economic commodity without offering an advantage to the public health.
Therefore
, in
this
case, the
government
should implement policies
such
as granting a limited time for the company to produce and sell the medication
as well as
adjusting the medication price in the market.
Thus
,
this
remedy is affordable for people.
Moreover
, many scientific
research
projects are funded by
the
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government
grant which is derived from public money
such
as taxes. The
government
ought to make sure that
this
study is not
wasting
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money and can bring about
the
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beneficial effects on society.
Furthermore
, many scientific studies involve
human
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humans
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as objects. For
this
, the
government
should employ
a
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strict
regulation
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regulations
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to protect and to ensure that there is no violation of human rights
as well as
no negative consequences resulting from
this
process.
To sum up
, I believe that the role of
government
to control
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scientific studies is essential to ensure that all the
research
purpose is purely to bring benefit to
community
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
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