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The diagram shows the production of circuit boards. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The diagram shows the production of circuit boards. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The diagram illustrates the process of producing circuit boards.
Overall
, circuit-board production consists of nine stages, starting from
delivery
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the delivery
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material
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. Three of the steps
in the beginning
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 are not repeated
as well as
last
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the last
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 two steps. The first step in
production
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the production
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 of circuit boards is
delivery
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the delivery
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material
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 to the lab. After
that
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 it requires
to cut
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cutting
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 and
spray
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spraying
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 with
fire
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a fire
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 retardant. The
third
 step is cleaning
circuit
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the circuit
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 board. The fourth stage is automated IC attachment and soldering. The fifth step is visual
inspection
 and
quality
control
 testing. Visual
inspection
 and
quality
control
 testing may be taken
two
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 decisions. If
inspection
 and
quality
control
rejects
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 chips they will be thrown away. If
inspection
 and
quality
control
approves
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approve
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 they go to the final testing. Regarding
to
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results of final testing it goes to the packing and delivery to factories or to automated IC attachment and soldering again. The cycle will be repeated until final testing will be agreed
.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words inspection, quality, control with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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